Elevator pitch #3
1.) Well my feedback included that I was sitting down during the last pitch and that a target audience was not mentioned. I listened to those two tweaks in this pitch and tried to be enthusiastic as possible under this stressful time for all of us. The one thing I though was unreasonable was when someone told me to change my entire product design completely from online to paper. I understand that some places have bad connection or are locally rural but majority of shelters have access to the internet.
2.)I didn't feel the need for a target audience mention since my product is versatile in that regard, but I did it anyways because of how many people wanted to know. I also added some statistics just because someone made the point to mention that numbers show value to an argument.
3.) Reflection: I think this is better, pitch wise than my other two pitches. I was more detailed and I had an order in which I stated everything that I needed to say. As I hope no one notices I still have trouble speaking in front of a camera. I normally wouldn't but my family was in the room next to me and could hear my pitch, which made me nervous haha. I think I have improved on keeping my composure and formulating sentences that are clear and easy to understand ( if not then ill keep trying).
I hope you enjoy my pitch
https://youtu.be/-uugyAQRjws
2.)I didn't feel the need for a target audience mention since my product is versatile in that regard, but I did it anyways because of how many people wanted to know. I also added some statistics just because someone made the point to mention that numbers show value to an argument.
3.) Reflection: I think this is better, pitch wise than my other two pitches. I was more detailed and I had an order in which I stated everything that I needed to say. As I hope no one notices I still have trouble speaking in front of a camera. I normally wouldn't but my family was in the room next to me and could hear my pitch, which made me nervous haha. I think I have improved on keeping my composure and formulating sentences that are clear and easy to understand ( if not then ill keep trying).
I hope you enjoy my pitch
https://youtu.be/-uugyAQRjws
Hi Jacelynn,
ReplyDeleteGreat work on your third attempt at the elevator pitch. I think that you were very enthusiastic and showed a deep understanding of your product and the pitch that you wanted to give. I agree with your confusion on the criticism to put this on paper as opposed to websites being that there is a lot of access to computers at this time and you can reach more people with this being online. I know that it can be challenging to listen to your own voice and have your family overhear as well sometimes it is nice to have someone else listen/ watch before submitting.